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Some cities create housing for their growing population by providing taller buildings. Other cities create housing by building on wider areas of land. Which solution is better?

#cities #population #buildings #areas #land
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the
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recent
years
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 the increasing population has been a major concern for all
the
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countries. Both solutions
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it's
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 own advantages but as per what I think in the above situation building taller
buildings
 would be a better solution.
This
 solution is feasible as by providing people with taller
buildings
 rather than building on wider areas we would be saving a whole lot
a
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land
. The
land
then
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 can be used for more productive purposes
for example
 - farming, promoting industrialization and
for
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many more activities.
Furthermore
 building
houses
 on wider areas of
land
 would mean a
lot
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 construction which leads to Air and
Land
 pollution. Building multiple
houses
on
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wider
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a wider
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 area would contribute to high construction
cost
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. The ultimate goal of any city is to preserve
land
 rather than
building
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houses
. Taller
building
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buildings
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, on the other hand,
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on the other hand
 would require less
land
 and the construction would be rather fast than building
on
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 wider areas. How about
a
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 illustration,
Due to
a
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 increasing population a city has to provide
immedaitely
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immediately
a
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accomodation
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accommodation
to
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 100 people
,
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 if we think practically building a tall building would be
a
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 easier job than building
a
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50
houses
on
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wider
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a wider
the wider
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 area. I would not say building tall
building
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buildings
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 does not have any bad effect on
land
, it has but low when compared to housing
on
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wider
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a wider
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area
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areas
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. If we look at the Modern Era we will see that
young
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 population enjoy
high
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rise
 building
along with
the
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 stay. Most importantly they prefer buying
houses
 on high
rise
building
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buildings
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 as they provide
with
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various facilities like security,
gym
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 , pool etc.
This
 look of young citizens has given more value to
high
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high-rise
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rise
buildings
 as compared to low
rise
. In the
start
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 we find that both
solutuions
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solutions
 can be possible but when
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see
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the
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it's
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its
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pro's
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 and
con's
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 a
lot
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 confusion is cleared as we see through the illustration given above. The end result is that building taller
buildings
 gives us the most suitable solution for providing housing to people.
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