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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
#people #usa #food #restaurants
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This
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 report derives from a bar chart which illustrates the proportion of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 in restaurants frequently between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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, most
of
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apply
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the
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people
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 preferred eating once or twice a month or once a week more than the percentage of
people
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 who never or every day ate in fast
food
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 restaurants. Notably, considerably more than 30% of
people
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 consumed fast
food
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 once a week in 2006
while
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this
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 amount was the same once or twice a month in 2013.
Additionally
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, it’s clear that more percentage of consumers (20%) compared to 2003 and 2013
spend
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spent
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 their time in fast
food
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 restaurants. Meanwhile, the
amount
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 of
people
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 who ate a few times a year was the highest and equal rate (15% of
people
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) in 2006 and 2013.
While
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 5% of
people
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 never ate fast
food
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 in 2003, it’s similar to the rate of the
people
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 which is almost 5%
who
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whom
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 every day spend their time in
fast
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a fast
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food
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restaurant
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restaurants
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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