The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
This
report derives from a bar chart which illustrates the proportion of
people
who ate fast
food
in restaurants frequently between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, most
of
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the
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people
preferred eating once or twice a month or once a week more than the percentage of
people
who never or every day ate in fast
food
restaurants. Notably, considerably more than 30% of
people
consumed fast
food
once a week in 2006
while
this
amount was the same once or twice a month in 2013.
Additionally
, it’s clear that more percentage of consumers (20%) compared to 2003 and 2013
spend
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their time in fast
food
restaurants. Meanwhile, the
amount
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of
people
who ate a few times a year was the highest and equal rate (15% of
people
) in 2006 and 2013.
While
5% of
people
never ate fast
food
in 2003, it’s similar to the rate of the
people
which is almost 5%
who
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every day spend their time in
fast
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a fast
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food
restaurant
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restaurants
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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