The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
This
report derives from a bar chart which illustrates the proportion of people
who ate fast food
in restaurants frequently between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, most of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
preferred eating once or twice a month or once a week more than the percentage of people
who never or every day ate in fast food
restaurants.
Notably, considerably more than 30% of people
consumed fast food
once a week in 2006 while
this
amount was the same once or twice a month in 2013. Additionally
, it’s clear that more percentage of consumers (20%) compared to 2003 and 2013 spend
their time in fast Wrong verb form
spent
food
restaurants.
Meanwhile, the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
people
who ate a few times a year was the highest and equal rate (15% of people
) in 2006 and 2013. While
5% of people
never ate fast food
in 2003, it’s similar to the rate of the people
which is almost 5% who
every day spend their time in Change the pronoun
whom
fast
Add an article
a fast
food
restaurant
.Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
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