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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart compares the outcome of a study about individuals'
coffee
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 and
tea
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 purchasing and consuming habits in five urban areas in Australia.
Overall
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, it is evident that most citizens went to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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while
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 very few citizens bought fresh
coffee
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 in the same period.
To begin
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,
according to
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 the results of the survey, Melbourne and Hobart residents we the majority who went to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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 with a relatively similar rate of 63% which was by far the largest proportion.
Furthermore
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, when it came to instant
coffee
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 bought in the same period Hobart citizens recorded the highest rate of around 55% which was slightly greater than the rates at which Brisbane residents bought instant
coffee
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 and went to café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the
last
Linking Words
 4
weeks
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 each.
In contrast
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, throughout the cities of ,Australia very few individuals bought fresh
coffee
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 in a given time frame as compared to the percentage at which the other were purchased.
Also
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, in Adelaide residents who bought instant
coffee
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 in the
last
Linking Words
 4
weeks
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 percentage was slightly higher than those who went to a café for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the period of the study.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, café, weeks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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