Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Travelling plays an instrumental role in everyone's life. In
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some
people
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think that
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somewhere is
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experience and some
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it is a
waste
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of
time
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as well as
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money
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. Both views are discussed in the following paragraph
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along with
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my
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perspective
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To begin
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with, travelling is
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good experience for
people
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, if
people
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go outside in
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way they can learn a lot of things.
People
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go out of
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the country
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and learn other's
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culture
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language and one most important thing is that they can
know
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how's
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oher
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other
people
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lives and try different
varities
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varieties
of food and clothes.
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,
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people
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wear different types of clothes and eat different foods. With the help of travelling,
people
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can spend
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with loved ones. Nextly, travelling
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relaxation and smoothing life from
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a hectic
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schedule because everyone
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to earn
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money
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and fame they have no
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to spend
time
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with family, with travelling they can
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feel
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fresh and more energetic and spend valuable
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. On the flip side, every
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has two sides, there are some reasons travelling is a
waste
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of
time
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and
money
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.
Firstly
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,
people
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can
waste
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a lot of
money
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when they go outside
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if they go out of
country
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the country
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they spend a lot of amount on tickets , food and clothes , One thing is that they live in
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hotels and everyone knows the
hotels
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hotel's
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price in
europe
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countries.
Secondaly
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Secondly
,
people
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take holidays from work and some companies do not provide paid holidays in
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way they
waste
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money
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in double manners.
To
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conclusion, in my opinion,
people
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should go
for
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apply
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travelling and take some
time
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for
ourselves
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themselves
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and spend
time
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with
families
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their families
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and enjoy life.
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Ensure that your essay fully responds to the task by discussing both views and giving your own opinion. Provide more comprehensive and relevant examples to support your ideas.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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