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Some school leavers go travelling or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for their study?

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Most of the
students
 after graduation
tends
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tend
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 to
travel
 and find some job
instead
 of continuing to
university
.
Students
 have different options and they are free to do
which
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what
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 they think
are
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is
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 best for them.
This
 essay will discuss the
prons
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pros
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 and cons for
students
 who stop
school
 and prefer to
travel
 and
work
. Travelling locally or abroad to visit other places or find
a
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work
 will be beneficial for
students
. They will learn new knowledge and will experience how life is in
outside
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the outside
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 world. If they plan to
work
 and
its
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it's
it is
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 related to the course they decide to take in
university
, it will give them an edge.
Also
, they can put
this
working
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work
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 experience as
reference
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a reference
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 in their resume which is a plus
to
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for
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employer
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employers
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 whose seeking
an
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apply
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experienced candidates.
Moreover
, it will help them to save money and will help financially when they decided to continue their
univeristy
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university
.
However
,
students
 who did not pursue
university
 will affect their decision if they want to study later on. They will
realized
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realise
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 that
its
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it's
it is
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 better for them to
travel
 or to
work
 rather than
going
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go
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 to
school
. Having a
university
 degree will benefit
a
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apply
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students
 and they will get a higher salary, and not pursuing
school
 is not good if they want to have better
work
 with
a
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apply
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good benefits as they cannot demand more
due to
 their qualifications.
To conclude
,
students
 who prefer to
travel
 or
work
 will gain more experience in
real
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 world and
able
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be able
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 to save money and fund their tuition
fee
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fees
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 once they pursue
university
.
On the other hand
, it will be a drawback if they will not decide not to continue their
school
 as they feel working or
traveling
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travelling
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 are good for them. In my opinion, going to
university
 right after graduation is better to continue the momentum as having a
university
 degree is an advantage in getting a better job.
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