9.Full-time university students should spend a lot of time studying, but it is essential to be involved in other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Education
play
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a vital role in every
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life and
demand
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time investment in order to succeed. Especially,
post graduate
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students
are required to indulge
into
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extensive
hours
of learning which should not be done at the cost of
health
. In my opinion, for
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holistic development physical activities are as imperative as studying. To excel at
tertiary
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the tertiary
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level of education
students
are required to do deep analysis in the
choosen
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chosen
field which is a
time consuming
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task. At
this
level of
academics
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aspirants write
lengthy
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thesis
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, validated and referenced by experts of the faculty for which
students
read
plethora
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a plethora
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of books and articles. One can easily do the peripheral studies and can scan the books in
few
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hours
but
this
way of studying
do
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not allow a student to
graps
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grasp
the concept properly and become a future expert.
However
,
students
may need to become a book worm at higher levels of education but should
also
focus to stay fit mentally and physically.
Continuoius
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Continuous
and long
study
sessions usually become monotonous and
curtails
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the attentiveness among
students
.
Cognative
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Cognitive
health
is directly related
with
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physical
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the physical
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health
of a person,
hence
to
maintaine
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maintain
both
students
should engage in sports and other co-curricular activities. For an instance, my friend Mukesh was a bright student but gradually he lost his learning abilities
due to
excessive
study
hours
over many years. Doctors advised him to go on a vacation where he can do other activities of his interest which eventually helped him to come out of the situation. To recapitulate, both
study
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and having fun are crucial to
achieve
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desired goals and
full time
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students
should do hard work in
academic
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field but not at the cost of their
health
. I reckon they should make a schedule with a balance of
study
and recreational
hours
to
rejuvinate
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rejuvenate
and destress themself.
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