Overconsumption of sugar is unhealthy. Some people think that governments should take the responsibility to control sugar intake while others think it is the responsibility of individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.opinion about it.
Consuming large amounts of sugary
foods
could result in health problems in the future. Use synonyms
However
, some believe that individuals should be responsible for controlling their Linking Words
sugar
consumption, Use synonyms
while
others believe Linking Words
its
the Correct your spelling
it's
government
's role. In my view, it is the Use synonyms
government
who should regulate the Use synonyms
Use synonyms
amount
of sweet Change the quantifier
number
products
on the market.
When people take the notion that each and every person is supposed to make sure that they watch the Use synonyms
amount
of Use synonyms
sugar
they consume, they are usually Use synonyms
refering
to people who are health Correct your spelling
referring
consious
. If someone understands the negative effects of taking in a lot of sugars, Correct your spelling
conscious
they
they are likely to reduce or stop eating them. Correct pronoun usage
apply
On the other hand
, even if they want to, they find it difficult because there are no other alternatives. Linking Words
For instance
, there has been a growing concern that most South African school tuckshops sell sweets, chocolates and cakes Linking Words
instead
of fruits which put the children at risk of Linking Words
non communicable
diseases in the Add a hyphen
non-communicable
lon
run.
In order that Correct your spelling
long
sugar
intake Use synonyms
is
reduced, the Change the verb form
to be
government
should Use synonyms
be make
sure that it controls the Change the verb form
make
amount
of Use synonyms
sugar
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that is
put in Linking Words
foods
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such
as fizzy drinks, juices, alcohol, bread and cakes. These are the Linking Words
the
Remove the redundancy
apply
foods
mostly consumed by a large number of people on a daily basis. Use synonyms
This
can be done by introducing Linking Words
Use synonyms
Correct article usage
a sugar-tax
sugar-tax
. Correct your spelling
sugar tax
For example
, introducing Linking Words
this
worked significantly in the UK, Linking Words
such
that the South African Linking Words
government
Use synonyms
also
introduced it. Linking Words
As a result
, the companies reduced Linking Words
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amount
of Correct article usage
the amount
sugar
they added to their Use synonyms
products
and as well increased their prices. Use synonyms
Hence
, the consumers couldn't afford to buy them in large quantities.
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Besides
these stiff laws, the authorities can Linking Words
also
regulate the types of Linking Words
foods
that should be sold in schools Use synonyms
as well as
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making
sure that sweet items which are normally placed in tills be placed Wrong verb form
make
at
the back shelves of the supermarkets. Change preposition
on
This
prevents impulse buying associated with the purchase of these goods. Moreso, advertisements of Linking Words
such
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products
can be stopped by the Use synonyms
government
and be replaced by healthier Use synonyms
foods
which include vegetables and fruits.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
high
intake of sugary Correct article usage
a high
foods
results in an unhealthy nation. Even if individuals try to reduce eating them, Use synonyms
its
remains a governmental responsibility to Correct pronoun usage
it
reduces
these Wrong verb form
reduce
products
by regulating production and advertisements.Use synonyms
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