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Write a letter to your friend who lives in another country and in your letter: Invite him/her to a public event in your country. Describe the public event Explain about other plans you have for your friend when she/he will visit

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I hope that you are doing fine and I pray that you have the best of health and happiness. I am writing
this
 letter to invite you to come to a public
event
 in my country on March 3rd of 2023. The theme of
this
event
 is
about
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sneakers, there will be a lot of brands that you will be loved love (tidak menggunakan kalimat pasif) and I think you will buy some pairs of
sneaker
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on
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this
event
.
This
event
 will be held
on
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 “Sangkareang Garden” in the middle of Mataram city City.
Besides
 that sneakers
event
, there will be a presentation about how to take care of your sneaker by
our self
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yourself
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 at home. After the presentation
section
, it will be the question and answer
section
 with
source
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 person and
this
section
 will be exited
to
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 you.
Moreover
, after the question and answer
section
, there will be a performance band from Pee Wee Gaskins and Burgekill. These
band
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 are the guest star
on
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this
event
 and
that is
 why you will love those band
performance
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performances
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in
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 the
last
event
. I think
that is
 all about
this
 letter to invite you to
this
event
, I hope you can come to
this
event
 with me Best regards Dwitya
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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