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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
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There is an ongoing debate about whether
university
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students
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 should
study
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 whatever
they
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interests
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 or should
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apply
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only be allowed to
study
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subjects
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 that will be useful in the
future
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. In my opinion,
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 to
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university
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students
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 to learn their majors to meet their
future
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development
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, allowing them to
study
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 the
subjects
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 they are interested in is more
condusive
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conducive
 to a more balanced social
development
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.
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 with,
university
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students
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who choose
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choose
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 the
subjects
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 they are interested in is more likely to gain
a good grades
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good grades
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, they will devote themselves wholeheartedly to their
study
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 because there is a saying that interest is the best teacher.
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,
students
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 will be tired to learn courses they dislike.
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, compelling a student who is keen on literature to
study
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computer
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science
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 is inappropriate because he/she can not achieve a great accomplishment in the
computer
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industy
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industry
 by their literary passion.
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, there are countless connections between different disciplines. The concentration of
students
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 studying in specific fields may bring a negative impact on the
development
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 of
science
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.
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, the
development
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 of
computer
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science
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 is based on various basic disciplines
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 as mathematics and physics,
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, the progress of those basic disciplines may be slowed down by a lack of passionate
students
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, which can even affect the progress of
computer
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science
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.
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,
university
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students
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 only
study
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 useful
subjects
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is
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are
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 conducive to their employment in the
future
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. They may be more likely to find a job in some hot fields
such
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 as Artificial intelligence or Big data analysis because of the huge demand for talent from enterprises. In conclusion,
while
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university
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students
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 only
study
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 useful
subjects
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 can improve their employment rate in the
future
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, they learn what they are keen on and are more likely to achieve better grades.
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, imbalanced student distribution in different
subjects
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 may adverse to the
development
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 of
science
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.
However
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, those targeted
students
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 can meet the talent needs of enterprises.
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