Many things which were done in the home by hand in the past are now done by machines. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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has changed
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upside down.Since
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been incorporated
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process
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making
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so many
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were made using traditional methods. I firmly believe it has more benefits than drawbacks. Both the pros and cons are discussed in the following paragraphs. Out of all the positives,foremost is, precision. In big
companies
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manufacturing is done on
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scale which requires accuracy which can be achieved using a mechanical device.
Besides
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time which is a must in today's
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world.
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, a famous clothing company used to prepare only 500 metres of clothing material in a day in 1940 but as of now, it is generating
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folds of what
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was used to be.
On the other hand
, automation is the prominent reason
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many people
loosing
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their job. As a machine can do
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of many persons, big industries are now roping more in automation than
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human
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.
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, Tesla a leading company in automobiles has released its 3000 workers and now their work is being done by 30 robots.Another disadvantage is that
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machines, sometimes
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higher as not only it consumes more electricity but
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maintainance
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maintenance
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is
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costlier. In conclusion,
instrumentation
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is what
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world needs today but it should be kept in mind that it should not
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deprive
someone of his/her bread and butter.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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