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Many things which were done in the home by hand in the past are now done by machines. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Industrial
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revolution
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 has changed
world
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the world
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 upside down.Since
than
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have
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 been incorporated
in
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process
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the process
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making
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of making
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 so many
stuffs
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those
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 were made using traditional methods. I firmly believe it has more benefits than drawbacks. Both the pros and cons are discussed in the following paragraphs. Out of all the positives,foremost is, precision. In big
companies
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 manufacturing is done on
large
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 scale which requires accuracy which can be achieved using a mechanical device.
Besides
this
, using instruments for production save
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time which is a must in today's
fast moving
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 world.
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, a famous clothing company used to prepare only 500 metres of clothing material in a day in 1940 but as of now, it is generating
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 folds of what
is
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it
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 was used to be.
On the other hand
, automation is the prominent reason
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 many people
loosing
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losing
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 their job. As a machine can do
work
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 of many persons, big industries are now roping more in automation than
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human
being
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beings
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.
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, Tesla a leading company in automobiles has released its 3000 workers and now their work is being done by 30 robots.Another disadvantage is that
,
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 machines, sometimes
costs
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 higher as not only it consumes more electricity but
also
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maintainance
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maintenance
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repairing
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is
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 costlier. In conclusion,
instrumentation
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the instrumentation
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 is what
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 world needs today but it should be kept in mind that it should not
deprieve
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deprive
 someone of his/her bread and butter.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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