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Nowadays people prefer to shop in large supermarkets rather than nearby local shops, why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or negative trend

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Shopping has become a part of our life,
that
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 how and where it is done has become a thing of concern to many. shoppers,
this days
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this day
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, preferably use the bigger supermarkets
instead
 of the nearby local shops, a fact, not up for
a
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debate. In
this
 essay,I will analyse the reasons behind
this
 and why it is a positive trend. The decision by most to buy from large shopping
malls
 against the nearby stores can be attributed to the comfortable and convenient shopping environment these big
malls
 provide. These stores usually have designated and
well labelled
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 aisles for different
category
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categories
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 of items like toiletries, groceries, kitchen utensils, winery, making it easy to find the goods you need. Fresh and well-ventilated display areas, and spacious parking
area
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areas
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,
making
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 it a pleasure to visit them.
Secondly
,
the
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they
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 have the capacity to stock a variety of items, leaving the buyer with a range of wares, aiding him
make
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 a better choice.
For instance
,
persil
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Persil
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, waw, omo,
areil
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ariel
,
bonus
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and bonus
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, are all
detergent
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detergents
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, and
this
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this mall
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malls
 can have all in
there
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their
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 inventory, leaving the customer with options to choose from which most likely will not be available in the nearby shops.
Thirdly
,
this large supermarkets
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this large supermarket
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 over time become brands, with an image to protect,
consequently
, are very cautious of the quality of goods and services
the
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they
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 offer, because a little scandal can have very dire consequences.
For example
, a citizen who suffers food poisoning after consuming a piece of pie bought from ShopRite supermarket makes news headlines and may lead to
series
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a series
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 of
letigation
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litigation
 that may cause the brand heavy financial and public relations loss,
therefore
, extra measures are taken by these shops to prevent
such
.
This
 trend is positive as it has resulted in
the
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people getting better service and value for their money. In conclusion, better service quality provided by
thislarge
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these large
malls
 has no doubt resulted in more people opting to shop with them.
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