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The table details the international tourist arrivals in millions in 8 countries in 2009 and 2010 and the changes (in percentages).

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The table illustrates the changes in the arrivals of tourists in nine countries in 2009 and 2010.
Overall
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, France remained the most popular tourist destination among 9 countries in both years,
while
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 the opposite was true for Hong Kong.
In addition
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, all countries, except for Turkey, China and Germany, witnessed no significant changes in their figures after one
year
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. The numbers of visitors to Italy, Spain and the US were 44
million
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, 55
million
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, and 66
million
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 respectively in 2009, after which these figures all increased by 1
million
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. Starting with the same figure as Spain, the UK experienced a growth rate of 1.8%, resulting in 57
million
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 tourists in the second
year
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. Meanwhile, the figure for travellers to France remained unchanged, at 76
million
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, in both years.
While
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 Turkey and China recorded considerable growth rates of 33% and 55% respectively after one
year
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, Germany's figure saw a dramatic increase, with the initial number of 11
million
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 significantly rising to 23
million
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 in 2010, indicating a growth rate of 109%.
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, Hong Kong attracted fewer tourists in the second
year
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, with 9
million
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 compared to 10
million
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 in 2009.
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