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The bar chart below shows the number of tourists in three nations who traveled to New Zealand in 1999 and 2009. The graph below shows the number of tourists who spent their holiday in two different ways. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of tourists in three nations who traveled to New Zealand in 1999 and 2009. The graph below shows the number of tourists who spent their holiday in two different ways. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares how many
travelers
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 in three countries took a trip to New
Zealand
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 between 1999 and 2009, and the line chart compares the vacation spent by visits staying at resorts or backpacking.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the UK visitors and the US visitors displayed an upward trend over a period of 10 years. We can
also
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 see that more and more
travelers
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 chose backpacking for their vacation.
According to
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 the bar chart, New
Zealand
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 attracted more Japanese in 1999, reaching around 1.5
million
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. The figure for the UK and the US
travelers
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 coming to New
Zealand
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 was 1 and 0.8
million
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 in 1999 respectively. But in 2009, the number of the UK who went to New
Zealand
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 was the highest, at 1.6
million
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. Looking at the activities during their holiday time, we can see that the majority of people stayed at resorts on their vacation,
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 just very few people chose to backpack in 1999. After peaking at approximately 2.4
million
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 in 2004, the figure for staying at resorts declined significantly.
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