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Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that the earlier the student starts learning a language the better.
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, others opine that these programs ought to
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 in secondary classes. I will discuss both sides of
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 argument as far as I am concerned I am in favour of the prior notion because young people have passion and learning potential to learn new things in life.
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 with, the young generation has more passion to learn when they start their school journey.
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, they have the ability to grasp knowledge more quickly than adult ones.
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, if schoolers learn English in primary school they will become fluent in English.
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, in the future, they will not face problems with writing tests to apply for higher education in foreign countries.
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, learning language-related courses
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 as Hindi, French and English at a younger age is beneficial to children. Shifting towards the final notion, courses which enhance speaking skills ought to
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 for a later time. In secondary schools, adults can find a plethora of ways to gain knowledge of any course. To cite an example, they can use different software and find tutors online to enhance their speaking skills.
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, they can learn without difficulty with a broad spectrum. In conclusion,
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, at the secondary level, students can learn speaking skills with the help of technology.
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, in my opinion, children must start learning these courses at junior levels as the possibility
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 at
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 level is higher than at a later time.
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Task Response
Work on providing a more balanced view of both sides of the argument. Instead of simply stating your opinion, try to present a more thorough analysis of the opposing viewpoint.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but could be expanded to provide a more comprehensive overview of the essay. Additionally, focus on establishing stronger connections between sentences and paragraphs to improve coherence.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • cultural awareness
  • effective language acquisition
  • early exposure
  • natural pronunciation
  • intonation
  • foundational literacy skills
  • multilingual education
  • intensive study
  • foundational understanding
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