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Nowadays more tasks at home and work are being performed by robots. Is this a negative or positive development?

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At present days it seems like
machines
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 are entering at home
as well as
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 at
work places
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workplaces
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.
Significance
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The significance
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 of robot is augmenting
day
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 by
day
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;
however
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, it has some detrimental effects which can’t be overlooked.
Following
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 essays will show
its
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 adverse effect of modern
robots
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. For a start, it is invariably true that people have become lazy
day
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day
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due to
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surge
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the surge
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 in the number of modern
machines
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 at home like washing
machines
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, dish
washer
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washers
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, and many more.
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,
machines
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 have not only made human life easier but
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does
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work within
minimal
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a minimal
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 time ratio. It has some disadvantages as well like unhealthy body, long term illness. The main culprit behind it is the modern
robots
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 which
disables
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 human beings to perform
such
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day to
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day-to-day
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day
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 tasks like washing clothes, cleaning dishes
such
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 activities which
allows
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allow
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 our body to move that allows to burn some calories that
helps
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 to reduce illness.
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 could be exemplified as recent reports of hospital
shows
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 that there is more number of cities patient than compared
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village
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a village
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. Because, neither they use
such
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 modern
machines
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 nor they are machine friendly which allows them to stay fit. Having said that, in factories, laboratories and in mechanical sectors there are lots of contemporary
machines
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 which directly
affects
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 the employment rate of people which is
alarming
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an alarming
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 concern for
nation
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the nation
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. There is enough compelling that many automobile factories started achieving their target by
robots
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 which
does
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 repetitive work effectively and efficiently.
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this
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,
such
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 factories can’t afford
such
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 employees which
engender
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engenders
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 the survival of the staff.
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, numerous
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belief
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 that half of the world’s population will lose jobs in
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the nest
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nest
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next
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 fifty years. Future technologies
such
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 as artificial intelligence
is
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 capable of creating
robots
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 smarter than
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human, which can endanger mankind and other lives on earth. Certainly, artificial intelligence can play
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 crucial role in many informatics technology departments.
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,
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presents
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robots
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 can help to save time and money in many places but it
also
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 causes
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a substantially
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substantially
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 decrease in
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a number
the number
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number of
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employment which leads to
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a shrink
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shrink
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the
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 GDP.
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, physical movement of
body
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the body
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 in performing
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day to
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day-to-day
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day
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task
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tasks
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 can
helps
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 to reduce
to fall
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 sick rather than using hi-tech
machines
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Artificial intelligence (AI)
  • Humanoid
  • Machine learning
  • Task allocation
  • Operational costs
  • Manual labor
  • Disruptive technology
  • Ergonomics
  • Unemployment
  • Cybersecurity
  • Technological singularity
  • Redundant workforce
  • Innovation
  • Ethical considerations
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