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Nowadays people prefer to shop in large supermarkets rather than nearby local shops, why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or negative trend

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In recent years, shopping has become the focus of people's concern. More and more human beings are willing to go shopping in huge supermarkets,
instead
 of in the local
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ones
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. In
this
 essay, I intend to examine
this
 topic from different perspectives and discuss why
that is
 the case. First of all, shopping has become a crucial part of today’s consumerist society's daily routine.
Due to
this
 increasing mania to buy new things, individuals prefer shopping in colossal shopping centres with a variety of magazines in them.
Moreover
, nearly local shops are seen
such
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as useless by virtue of their narrow range of goods and poor choice of different products. As every garden has weeds,
this
 tendency
also
 has downsides.
Firstly
, local shops are essential for
country’s
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 economy and contribute both to the state’s prosperity and to the citizens by providing them with more
work places
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 available. For the sake of choosing huge brands, others have become empty and eventually gone out of business
due to
 their extremely low incomes.
Secondly
, it is believed that in large manufacturing companies, employers bet most on
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quality rather than
the
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quantity.
Thus
, when people buy from these stores they presumably assist
the
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 maintaining of mass-production, which apparently, has numerous cons. To put it in the nutshell, I believe that it is
further
 beneficial to go shopping at local shops,
due to
 their fresh food and even hand-made products. Unfortunately, shopping in large supermarkets is negative development which can cause several adverse effects on society.
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