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Band 4.5

Some parents prefer that their children study abroad, to what extent do you agree with this view?

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I would like to complete my
research
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 on extracting
tomato
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 seed
oil
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. I believe that
Japan
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 has many possibilities to offer researchers, and I would like to complete my
research
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 on extracting
tomato
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 seed
oil
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. As
Japan
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 produces more than 80,000 tons of
tomato
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 juice, and the percentage increases every year, which increases the
amount
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 of unexploited seeds. Since the seeds contain an
oil
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 content of up to 20%, so I would like to complete my
research
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 in
Japan
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 and devise non-traditional ways to extract
tomato
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 seed
oil
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.
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 to the use of nanotechnology in encapsulating the
oil
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 of
tomato
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 seeds to increase its shelf life and protect it from oxidation. The transfer of scientific knowledge in a specialized
field
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 from
Japan
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 to
Egypt
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, especially in the agricultural
field
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 and the use and recycling of agricultural
waste
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, as
Japan
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 is a pioneer in
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field
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, and
Egypt
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 is primarily an agricultural country and has many problems related to the exploitation of agricultural
waste
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 and its use as non-traditional sources of food. 3-
Japan
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 produces tomatoes by
a
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percentage5.6%, and carrots by a percentage
4.2
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 of the total vegetable production. These sources have residues of up to 50%. Natural pigments
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 as carotene and lycopene can be extracted from
this
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waste
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 and used as natural
colorants
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 after encapsulating them by nanotechnology.
Egypt
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also
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 needs more
research
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 in
this
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field
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. It is worth mentioning that
Egypt
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 fourth country in the world in the production of tomatoes and has a large proportion of
waste
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, which causes major environmental problems.

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