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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Concerning the issue of whether some people say that kids whose parents that not have enough financial conditions are better than children who grew up in rich families in life. I believe that smart youngsters who were born into rich families can decide on problems
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 the following reasons. First of all, children who resolve problems for the great are really smart. In my opinion, their intelligence and the best education
that is
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 more expensive connect to each other. Of course, it high education gives them about life’s a lot of skills
such
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 as solving
some
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apply
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problems,
respect
Wrong verb form
respecting
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 people, and forgiving to something.
For instance
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, The people who took higher education are working in good positions, making decisions and managing companies. …….Some children with not enough finance have
less
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fewer
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 chances to study at a good school. Few kids can come to the best university and
college
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colleges
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. The left part is used for bad habits like smoking, drugs and games because their parents cannot care for them.
On the other hand
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, a poor family’s child can do
this
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 position.
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, compared to these 2 groups,
teenages
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teenagers
 whose parents have huge amounts of money are more than better off in real life.
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