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The diagrams below show changes that have taken place in the Sawry District neighbourhood since 1920. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show changes that have taken place in the Sawry District neighbourhood since 1920. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate a comparison between the Sawry District region of 1920 and that of 2020. In general, it is evident that the town has become more developed, with more shops, more apartments, better schools and a bridge. One interesting change is new buildings have been constructed in the urban of all areas.
Such
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 as The Prestwich Primary School has been redeveloped to be bigger than the old school, which was located in the southwestern area of the
city
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 and made into Lonoco Petrol Station. In 1920, there wasn't any petroleum, but it has been built near Miller’s Lake. Another development has been the construction of the Yang Office Complex in the north-western area of the
city
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, which previously was Tulebug Bros. Cannery. Some flats have been introduced in front of Oak Avenue. If we look at the tiny changes, it has been a bridge and a bike path near Elmwood River since 1920.
However
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, remove the beach was located in
northeastern
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the northeastern
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 area of the
city
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 . A final interesting change is that some trees have been cut down, and a big school complex has been constructed.
Overall
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, it is evident that during
this
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 period, the urban is looking to become modernised and develop, but
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city's
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the city's
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 size is uncharged.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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