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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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To begin
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 with the first question, some employees stick around with their employer for a long time, even a lifetime, because of comfort. Working for the same
company
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 gives a person a sense of confidence and familiarity not just in relation to
work
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 but
also
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 with the
company
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's culture,
people
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, and environment. Some
people
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 feel like it is a comfort zone for them, and there is no need to change and move into a new working place.
Although
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this
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 may not be true for everyone, there is still no better place to be than to feel safe and comfortable with where we are working.
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, some
employers
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 offer
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additional pay or
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retention pay every year to every employee that stays.
This
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 is one of the biggest reasons why
people
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 keep working for their
employers
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.
Although
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this
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 may not be true for all, an increase in payout sounds appealing.
In contrast
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, there are some
people
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 who find it advantageous to
work
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 for multiple companies.
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 is
due to
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 the fact that working with different
employers
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 builds connections and enhances their
skills
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 to
work
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 in
a
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different
environment
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 with different
people
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.
Additionally
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,
this
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 will
also
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 widen their network to learn, socialize, and build relationships. One possible reason why
people
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 move to a new
company
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 is
due to
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 the bigger compensation offered. In a world where expenses are all getting higher, we
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 need to
work
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 for companies that can give us higher pay. Personally, I think working with multiple
employers
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 is better
due to
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 the fact that
this
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 will make a person grow in terms of
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,
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network, and their ability to adapt to changes, which is what every employer is looking for.
Additionally
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, a diverse
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 history may beef up a resume.
Employers
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 are more interested in hiring workers when they know that you have
skills
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 and knowledge in other areas.
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, if your past jobs were all about teaching math, you can tell the
employers
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 that you can
work
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 on developing
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 curriculum or activities.
To sum up
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, some
people
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 stay with
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employers
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their employers
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 for a long time because it is already their comfort zone. There are
also
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 some companies that offer additional pay for workers who choose to stay.
On the contrary
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, others move to a new
company
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 to seek better opportunities in terms of building new
skills
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, enhancing talents, and growing networks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Longevity
  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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