Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. Do you agree or disagree?

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A lot of major cities are facing the big problem of traffic and housing because of large
companies
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and factories.
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leads to a solution that those facilities and their employees could be moved to the
countryside
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.
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, there are many
arguements
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arguments
around
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way because of some reasons. In the
countryside
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, there are
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people with their houses and farms. So when a large factory is moved to these areas, many farmers will strongly disapprove. They will not
ready
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to give up their benefits from their farming lands which may bring the highest amount of income.
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, manufacturing industries affect the environment more negatively than agriculture.
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, emissions and waste productions which are released
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large
companies
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bring various problems like
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the greenhouse
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effect or global climate change.
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, I really think that moving large
companies
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and factories to the
countryside
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is a vital solution to help many big cities escape from heavy traffic or housing. The population in urban areas is much higher than that in
the
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suburban. When the government decides to transfer industrial structures to the
countryside
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, the decrease
of
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the number of people can open a possibility for many cities to handle a huge amount of
problem
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problems
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.
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,
lands
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the lands
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in the
countryside
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are much wider than in the city.
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, enlarging working areas can benefit the
companies
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to develop the ability of producing. And if we look at
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solution in a macro way, the domestic economy would change in a positive way. In conclusion,
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moving large
companies
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, factories and their employees to the
countryside
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can have some small problems, we can hardly deny that it
bring
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a lot of other benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • housing problems
  • countryside
  • large companies
  • factories
  • employees
  • urban areas
  • land availability
  • relocate
  • stimulate economic development
  • challenges
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • rural areas
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