how does the map describe the change of village park ?

how does the map describe the change of village park ?
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This
diagram shows the change
of
Change preposition
in
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the village
park
, it contrasts the difference after 10 years. 10 years ago, there were only two tennis courts in front of the entrance, and the
park
doubled the number of tennis courts now. At the west of the
park
is the car
park
, once it only can accommodate 20 cars, but it can accommodate 50 cars now. The pond was located north of the
park
, it becomes a boating lake now. On the left side of the lake, the
park
adds a picnic
area
for the guests. There were woods in
this
park
too,
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which is
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is
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located to the southwest of the
park
. Now there is only half of the woods still left here and the
park
built a cafe shop in the left woods to sell drinks.
Anotherother
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Another other
half of
wood
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the wood
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became the toilet and there is a new
children
's soft play
area
nearby the toilet now. The
children
's soft
area
is beside the
children
's play
area
. The
children
's play
area
never move location during these ten years
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