Some people argue that it is good for children to stay away from their families and go to a boarding school. Other suggest that children live with their families and attend a day school. What is your opinion?

There are several advantages and disadvantages of two type of schools which is
boarding
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a boarding
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school
and a day
school
.
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include
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the factors and personal experiences about two
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side of view of these two types of schools. It is undeniable that boarding
school
led
student
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students
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have more discipline and self-taking-care
skill
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skills
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because they have to do many activities by themself. From my personal experience, the skills that I got from boarding
school
are very valuable and help me to build up
time
management
skill
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. To exemplify, reside in boarding
school
,
student
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students
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have to take care of themself and manage their
time
which should be
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with
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the
school
rules and restrictions
such
as they could have a plan to do their homework, managing their free
time
to spend with friends and generating
time
for personal activities.
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these could create
a
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stress and strain for
children
if they could not handle all of them.
Therefore
the parents should check their
children
’s mental health and be a good support system that
children
can consult and pass the difficulties that they face in
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days in boarding
school
. Since the pandemic situation, apply a day
school
become more and more popular because many
parent
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parents
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have the desire to take care
their
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children
intimately because of many concerns
such
as health,
time
management and orientations of the change of study system which
children
may struck with
this
tough situation.
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this
choice of
school
could
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a
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lack of management skills because the parents always give their hands to help their child
to
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complete the tasks. By the way,
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situation
also
has
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beneficial because the young could have more family
time
than boarding
school
student
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students
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. They can share day-by-day experiences with their parents and
this
boundary
help
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children
restrain the stress from many problems that they had faced. In conclusion, as a boarding
school
student
,
this
type of
school
give
student
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many real-life survival skills anyway parent should be their child good support system.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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