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The graph above shows the use of land lines and mobile phones in 6 different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given graph gives us information about how many mobile phones and landlines are used in 6 different countries, namely America, China, Russia, Japan, Sweden and
Turkey
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Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that mobile phones are less used by American
people
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,
whereas
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 they are mostly put to use in
Turkey
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, Sweden and Japan. Another interesting point is that landlines are useful in China and
Turkey
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 the most. Looking at the details, it can be mentioned that Japanese
people
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 use the lowest percentage of landlines, less than 45% of
people
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By contrast
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, in China and ,
Turkey
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 they are used by more than 67,5 per cent. In terms of Russian
people
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, the percentage of use landline and mobile phones are quite similar, approximately 50 per cent and a little bit more than 67,5% respectively.
To conclude
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, it can be highlighted that mobiles are used by a lot of
people
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 in different countries.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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