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some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same openion as them. Other people believe its good to have friends who some time disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own openion.

Choosing a
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 is a challenging task . It is commonly agreed by some people that it is preferable to select
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 who will always have identical opinions
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 them. Others feel that it is much better to find
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 who often have an opposite opinion. In
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will discuss
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both
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 views, and I will explain
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 why
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 my
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 it is always better to combine
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 types of
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 in your circle of
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. Having a
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 with the same taste in different fields of interest,
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 as food, fashion, hobbies, or lifestyle, will help to develop a type of relationship
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 unique and rare, which
both
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 sides can enjoy and find a safe place without arguments, as the saying goes: "Great minds think alike".
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 teenagers will have a better connection
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 with a
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 thinks like them, and they will easily share their deepest secrets with someone they can relate to, rather than someone who disagrees with them and they are having a lot of conflicts with. But
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, it has been said in the past
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 that opposites are attracted to each other, and I agree with it. I believe that
friends
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 who don't think
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alike can contribute to themself enormously, than people who share the same thoughts. Having a wide range of opinions helps
friends
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 to learn how to be
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 others, and
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 enriches the knowledge of
both
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 sides. People who work in a team, do not always agree with each other points of view, it is common to preform among the team members a brainstorming - a discussion that helps to increase the level of creativity, or problem-solving,
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, brainstorming helps to expouse other team members to diverse ways of thinking, or even different ideas without being disrespectful to one another. In conclusion, it is known that
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 and creating
friends
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 is a work of art. Finding a good
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 is often complicated, especially in a world
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communicating
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 is usually done behind screens. I deeply believe that it is important to combine a
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diverse
 range of
friends
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, since it can only contribute to a person's social development.

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coherence
Your essay answers the task and gives both sides, with your view too. Plan your writing to be more clear.
coherence
Put one main idea in each paragraph and use simple links so the flow is clean.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar; many small errors make it hard to read.
task
Make your examples more exact and show how they prove your point.
task
The essay shows both sides and includes your view.
coherence
There is an attempt to give examples and use some good ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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