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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the kicauses of this? How can this problem be solved?

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Nowadays more and more people from the countryside are moving to cities places in order to get job opportunities , higher education , and higher living standard. Urban
life
 is always noisy and crowded for some reasons in terms of economic and Urban
life
 operations. There are many job opportunities in city
life
 , residents are working every day for their living costs. On the other ,hand they are following their careers and their dreams. They get marry
then
 become a big family. Education standard is higher than
the
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 countryside. Parents hoping for their kids to go higher education level. Urban
life
 is always as busy as the human body's
life
 cycles. Kids like to enjoy cities' facilities and the fact that cities are improving and up to date.
In addition
, the more businesses are increasing the more foreigners and tourists were attracted.They are being migrated to get more business-expanding activities. Urban technology influence peoples
then
 they are following all those techniques and
subsequently
 become part of their lives. As long as people chasing to techniques cost of living will rise. People too much rely on facilities and convenience will make urban
life
 to be crowded. We should stop chasing technologies.
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