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Some people prefer to live in a house while others feel that living in an apartment has more advantages.

#people #house #apartment
Nowadays, there are two types of
people
 those who
likes
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 to live in
its
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their own
house
 and those who think that apartments are better. As a matter of fact, most of
people
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 choose to live in a flat in a big
city
 but there are
also
 a lot who opt for a
house
. Both
of
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variants have their benefits and drawbacks. In
this
 essay
i
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I will discuss the pros and cons of living in a detached
house
mansions
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mansion
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and
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or
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apartments
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apartment
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. Discuss
Advantage
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Advantages
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 and disadvantages The first advantage is that all
people
 want to have personal space, where nobody would crash in. In that case, living in a detached
house
 is a perfect way to
fell
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 the whole freedom you have there. To be honest, I live in
an
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my
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 own
house
 and
i
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I
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 can firmly say that it is the quietest
place
 in the world that gives me an opportunity to relax after difficult days. The second benefit is that your own
place
 gives you
possibility
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the possibility
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 to decide how to rebuild or reconstruct something on your own. You may just make a garage for your car, plant a garden or just put
a
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fountain if you want. I can not add that
this
 type of
houses
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house
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 allow you to get a dog
,
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 when a lot of flats forbid their inhabitants to do it. On the other side, living in your own
house
 have some disadvantages.
For example
, it will not be any shops, and you will have to get to the
city
 to make purchases.
Also
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 not every village or agricultural town
allow
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people
 to do shopping online, delivery workers just decline requests to bring
people
 their purchases.
Also
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 there is a little variety of public transport. You will need to change busses or another transport in the
city
 to get to the right
place
.
To sum up
,
people
 will not have the same opinion about the question of whereof
place
 where to leave. On the one hand, it is very convenient to
live
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 leave in a crowded
city
, where everything,
such
 as shops and parks
are
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 nearby.
On the other hand
, everybody wants to be sometimes in
a
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silence and have
theiryour
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their your
 own space. In my opinion, it is much more comfortable to live in your
ownan
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own
 own
house
, because it is very quiet quietly there and you do not have neighbours that could disturb you.
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