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Some people prefer to live in a house while others feel that living in an apartment has more advantages.

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Nowadays, there are two types of
people
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 those who
likes
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 to live in
its
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their own
house
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 and those who think that apartments are better. As a matter of fact, most of
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people
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the people
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 choose to live in a flat in a big
city
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 but there are
also
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 a lot who opt for a
house
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. Both
of
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variants have their benefits and drawbacks. In
this
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 essay
i
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I will discuss the pros and cons of living in a detached
house
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mansions
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mansion
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and
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or
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apartments
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apartment
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. Discuss
Advantage
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 and disadvantages The first advantage is that all
people
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 want to have personal space, where nobody would crash in. In that case, living in a detached
house
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 is a perfect way to
fell
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feel
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 the whole freedom you have there. To be honest, I live in
an
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my
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 own
house
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 and
i
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 can firmly say that it is the quietest
place
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 in the world that gives me an opportunity to relax after difficult days. The second benefit is that your own
place
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 gives you
possibility
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the possibility
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 to decide how to rebuild or reconstruct something on your own. You may just make a garage for your car, plant a garden or just put
a
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up a
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fountain if you want. I can not add that
this
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 type of
houses
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house
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 allow you to get a dog
,
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 when a lot of flats forbid their inhabitants to do it. On the other side, living in your own
house
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 have some disadvantages.
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, it will not be any shops, and you will have to get to the
city
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 to make purchases.
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Also
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 not every village or agricultural town
allow
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people
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 to do shopping online, delivery workers just decline requests to bring
people
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 their purchases.
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Also
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 there is a little variety of public transport. You will need to change busses or another transport in the
city
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 to get to the right
place
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.
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,
people
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 will not have the same opinion about the question of whereof
place
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 where to leave. On the one hand, it is very convenient to
live
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 leave in a crowded
city
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, where everything,
such
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 as shops and parks
are
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is
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 nearby.
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, everybody wants to be sometimes in
a
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silence and have
theiryour
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their your
 own space. In my opinion, it is much more comfortable to live in your
ownan
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own
 own
house
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, because it is very quiet quietly there and you do not have neighbours that could disturb you.
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