Today many people do not know their neighbours, why is this? What can be done about this?

Nowadays,
people
are no longer friendly within their
neighbourhood
owing to the fact that no one knows who is trustworthy and
as a result
,
people
decide to mind their own business.
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,
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ago, In my previous
neighbourhood
, some law enforcement agents came to arrest some guys based on information that they were Internet fraudsters in which some innocent guys were accused of being accomplices just because they used to be friendly with these criminals, luckily for me I was not around probably I would have
also
been a victim,that experience has personally taught me to always mind my business wherever I go and
this
is why I chose to be private in my new
neighbourhood
.
Secondly
,
people
hardly know each other in the
neighbourhood
because everyone is busy making ends meet, money is what everyone is after, so they hardly have time to socialise,
for example
since I moved to my new apartment, I have never met my next door neighbour and it's over three months now, I learned He works on the island, meaning He wakes up as early as 4am so as to beat traffic and avoid lateness to work, it's really a complex situation that almost everyone is guilty of. In my opinion, I think the solution to
this
is to always remember the saying that says "love your neighbour as yourself " that's the first step that
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taken in order to change the situation for
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, in
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your neighbours are closer to you than your family members, in case there is any emergency situation, how would you call for help when you don't know
who
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to call immediately? Our mindsets have to change towards loving one another and stop being competitive,
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people
should understand that we are all social animals, socialising is key in all human endeavours,
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one enjoys life in isolation. In conclusion, love is paramount in life and living, because if you love you can not harm or implicate
innocent
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person,
also
if you understand life fully you will appreciate socialisation
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more and these factors would make you appreciate your neighbours and know them better.
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  • neighbourhood bonds
  • social media connectivity
  • urban lifestyle
  • online relationships
  • fast-paced society
  • privacy concerns
  • communal relations
  • individualism
  • transient societies
  • expatriates
  • cultural shift
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