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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restrauants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter, remind him when and where you met, tell him what kind of job you are interested in, say why you think you would be suitable for the job

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Dear Mr. David, I am writing to express my interest in the manager position at China Jade restaurant that you mentioned
last
 week.
To begin
, I remembered we were both reading a magazine about business management at the lounge of LAX International Airport. You mentioned that you own several restaurants in my hometown and that you are hiring a worker who knows about managing a restaurant. I would like to work as a manager at one of your restaurants. I had previous experience managing a business when I used to work with my parents. I am a hard-working person
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 you can count on to complete any task with quality output. Aside from that, I
also
 have a degree in business management, which I think would make me a suitable candidate for the job. Attached to
this
 email is my resume. It is my hope to receive your response with a positive note about a possible interview. Thank you for your time and consideration.  Your
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Denicee
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Denise
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