The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.

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The provided chart shows the

protion

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portion

of the adults in cities and villages who

interested

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were interested

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in their four free time tasks in 1990 and 2010.

Overall

, the most activity was reading and the

least

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last

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one was

photography

. On

one

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hand, in 1990, the most activity in urban was reading, but it was

also

lower than in rural by 10 per

cent

. And these activities

was

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the same, 8 per

cent

by animated play, 5 per

cent

by playing and the

last

one,

was

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7 per

cent

photography

. On the

others

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hand, in 2010, the percentage of reading in

citites

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cities

and

village

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villages

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increase slightly, and the

protion

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portion

of it was equally about 78 per

cent

. The proportion of these animated

play

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plays

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and

photography

was higher than others 20 years ago but it wasn't higher than it was in rural. The

last

acitivity

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activity

was

photography

it grew

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about 10 per

cent

than

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1990 but it

coundn't

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couldn't

higher than it

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was in

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rural.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

161 words

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The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.

In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

Fewer young people play sports these days. Why is this? what can be done to encourage more young people to do sports.

When a new town is planned, it is more important to develop public parks and sport facilitates than shopping centers for people to spend their free time in. Agree or disagree?

Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?e?