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The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.

The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.
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The provided chart shows the
protion
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portion
 of the adults in cities and villages who
interested
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were interested
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 in their four free time tasks in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, the most activity was reading and the
least
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last
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 one was
photography
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. On
one
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the one
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 hand, in 1990, the most activity in urban was reading, but it was
also
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 lower than in rural by 10 per
cent
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. And these activities
was
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were
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 the same, 8 per
cent
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 by animated play, 5 per
cent
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 by playing and the
last
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 one,
was
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7 per
cent
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 by
photography
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. On the
others
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other
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 hand, in 2010, the percentage of reading in
citites
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cities
 and
village
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villages
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 increase slightly, and the
protion
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portion
 of it was equally about 78 per
cent
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. The proportion of these animated
play
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plays
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 and
photography
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 was higher than others 20 years ago but it wasn't higher than it was in rural. The
last
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acitivity
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activity
 was
photography
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 it grew
up
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by
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 about 10 per
cent
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than
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in
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 1990 but it
coundn't
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couldn't
 higher than it
in
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was in
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 rural.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words photography, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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