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Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have different views about whether students should start learning a foreign language in
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 a foreign
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language
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, every pupil in the first
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 tasks. If they
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pupils
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 health.
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 and parents do not risk with their children On the other hand, I support the opinion of those who argue that student learning a
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language
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because
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kindergarden
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kindergarten
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because
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languages
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improve their
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knowladge
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knowledge
. So they can find information with extra
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language
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Then
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class
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learning extra
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this
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class
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, I consider that they are advantageous for some factors
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • cultural awareness
  • effective language acquisition
  • early exposure
  • natural pronunciation
  • intonation
  • foundational literacy skills
  • multilingual education
  • intensive study
  • foundational understanding
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