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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
People have a perspective that learners should be allowed to choose their favourite
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 others argue that universities should only concentrate on study programs that support their future jobs. I prefer the latter view.
Body paragraph 1
If
students
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 are able to learn
subjects
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 of their choice, they will have more passion and interest in their path of learning.
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, no one can predict what will happen in the future.
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 people will not know which jobs are in demand.
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 learning a diverse range of majors may help them equip some useful
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 for the forward path.
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, art and humanity classes will equip
students
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 with critical thinking,
teamworking
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, and active learning strategy
skills
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 which will benefit them in the long run.
Body paragraph 2
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, studying
subjects
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 related to each other allows them to gain more depth and job-focused knowledge and
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.
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, they will increase their employment opportunities, have more chances to develop their career and better career advancement.
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, companies can coordinate with universities to develop co-op programs which allow
students
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 to gain real working experience during studying time.
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, the government can meet the needs of the marketplace and
also
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 easier to zone the jobs market through study programs.
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, choosing a professional major in university assists the government in ensuring the human resource supply,which has suitable knowledge and
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, for the demand of the economy.
Conclusion
In conclusion, even though there are many benefits to allowing
students
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 to pick their favourite
subjects
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, I still support the perspective that learners should concentrate on useful knowledge for the future which can help them to have an easier and more advanced start.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion clearly present the main points and opinion. Make sure that the main points are clearly supported throughout the essay.
task achievement
Provide a more balanced discussion of both perspectives, and develop each idea with more depth. Support your opinion with more detailed and relevant examples.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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