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You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some time off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Ask for some time off to complete a qualification. Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. Say how the qualification helps your job or company.

#qualification #time #work #manager #job #company
Dear Derek, Hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and best of
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spirits. First of all, I would like to thank you for
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 of my hard
work
 towards
to
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the project.
Secondly
, I'm planning to take a 5-month time off to explore
more
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deeper into AWS Cloud technologies. I'm planning to enroll
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AWS
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the AWS
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 Associate
course
 in Softtech Solutions, the
course
 duration is 4 months and after completion of the
course
, they will conduct an exam and
awarded
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 with a certificate. Once, I
certified
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 with Cloud technologies, I will improve our static
work
 to
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automation
 process.
Consequently
, it helps us to reduce the long
work
 hours and
also
 we may gain some benefits from the company. In future, the AWS
course
 might help us to
work
 on more projects with
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 clients and it could be
benificial
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beneficial
 for the team
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company
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 annual growth. Kindly grant me 5-month leave to study new skills. I look forward to hearing from you soon for the approval. Yours Sincerely, Naga Swetha
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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