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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
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The bar graph depicts about
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 of telephone calls in the united kingdom from 1995 to 2002 and it is divided into three categories ( Local fixed lines, national and international fixed lines, and mobile call calls) As an overview, a call by fixed line is maximum and it increased till 2999
then
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 started declined
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 it followed the decreased trend.
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 national and international mobile calls followed an increased trend.
Minutes
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 of calls by local line was more than 70
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 in 1995 and it was the highest in 1999 with 90
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.
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 it declined and in the end, it was around 70
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, national and international
minutes
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 of calls were between 30 to 40
billion
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 it started increasing and reached 60
billion
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 in 2002. All calls
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 mobiles
ware
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 the lowest in 1995 with less than 10
billion
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minutes
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 but it followed
increased
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an increased
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 trend and in the year
of
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2002 it reached more than 40
billion
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minutes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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