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Some people think that to learn a second language well it is necessary to live in the country where that language is spoken.What is your opinion about this?

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Some people think that it is a good way to learn a second
language
 in the
country
 where that
language
 is spoken. I am convinced that it is important to learn a
language
 in its motherland because of the fact that improvement will be very fast and
also
 pronunciation will be right. On the one hand, it is necessary to move
another
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country
 for learning
language
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the language
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. I can say that one of the best
benefit
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 is fast improvement. I think so because that person
,
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 will be needed to think, speak and understand
in
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that
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language
, where he must speak. In fact, it gives
a
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rapid improvement.
For example
, if a need to learn
English
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language
 for studying at university for a little time, I will move to USA, Australia or England, because there
i
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 will speak only English.
On the other hand
,
it is clear that
 if you study
the
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 second
language
 in another
country
, you will have a pronunciation like a
ative
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native
active
 speaker. I think so because you will try to speak and imitate as a native speaker. As we know, most of
native
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 speakers speak rightly.
For instance
, if l
listen
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 the native speaker's pronunciation, I will speak as they speak.
That is
 why, I think that it improves the speech.
To sum up
, I believe that there are a big number of benefits
of
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 leaving
country
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the country
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 for learning
the
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a
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 second
language
.
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