Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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children
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willing
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willingness
society
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while
others think Linking Words
children
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make
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making
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although
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children
to make their choices in anything may spoil them and lead to a Use synonyms
society
lacking Use synonyms
of
cooperation, its benefits on kids' Remove the preposition
apply
personality
development can not be ignored.
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satisfying
choices
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choice
children
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satisified
they will become perverse. If Correct your spelling
satisfied
this
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personality
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become
common among Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
people
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society
will become lacking of cooperation.Those Use synonyms
people
who were indulged by their parents when they were young will always think they are right, they will feel it is difficult to accept other suggestions. It can be painfulUse synonyms
,
because there are many things that need to be compromised in life. Remove the comma
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live
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who live
this
vibe will become lacking Linking Words
of
trust and hard to cooperate.
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apply
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, allowing Linking Words
children
to make their own choice in moderation Use synonyms
is
able Unnecessary verb
apply
to
cultivate their independent Fix the infinitive
apply
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personality
. They will gain confidence and learn how to take responsibility by making Fix the agreement mistake
personalities
choice
on certain Fix the agreement mistake
choices
matters
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children
who choose a packaged toy are responsible for its result, regardless of Use synonyms
whatever
the toy inside is worth to play or not. Correct word choice
whether
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, Correct your spelling
Additionally
children
who pick their own interest classes will treat the courses more seriously, they are more likely Use synonyms
achieve
good results.
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to achieve
children
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make
decisions by Wrong verb form
making
them selves
can improve their confidence and Correct your spelling
themselves
the
sense of responsibility, which has a positive impact on Correct article usage
apply
development
of Add an article
the development
independent
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an independent
personality
. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, parents extremely indulge Linking Words
children
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on
every Change preposition
in
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matters
may spoil them, Change to a singular noun
matter
our
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and our
society
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self serving
if Add a hyphen
self-serving
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becomes
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