"In some countries the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation, and discourages private vehicle ownership. Do you think advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?"

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Nowadays, in certain
countries
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the authority wants to make public
transport
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as
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the core means of transportation.
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, they want to remove personal vehicles from the
roads
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. From my perspective, I agree with them.
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, there are some drawbacks. So, in
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essay
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I will
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explore
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thought-provoking issue. On the one hand, public
transport
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has overwhelming benefits which can influence
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climate change and global warming.
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with, the vital concept of
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project is reducing traffic congestion and alleviation
of
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roads
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tension.
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, as I mentioned before decreasing of personal cars
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the
roads
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gain less
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and carbon dioxide emissions.
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, it can slow down climate change and global warming.
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, it is evident that using
public
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system
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is chipper
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chipper
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and even faster.
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, we cannot underestimate the drawbacks of public
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.
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, in many
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you will wait a long time appropriate bus or tramp.
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, you can waste a lot of your free time.
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, it is not always convenient using it.
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, there
are
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will not be always suitable
roads
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for you.
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, you have to rely on the bus driver. Considering that you cannot administrate him and you do not know the mental and health state of
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driver. So, in some
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it can be dangerous. In conclusion,
opportunities
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the opportunities
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which are provided by public
transport
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are not always useful and appropriate.
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, if it is possible to get over all the disadvantages, there will be only the benefits that remain.
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