"In some countries the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation, and discourages private vehicle ownership. Do you think advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?"

Nowadays, in certain
countries
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the authority wants to make public
transport
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the core means of transportation.
Also
, they want to remove personal vehicles from the
roads
. From my perspective, I agree with them.
However
, there are some drawbacks. So, in
this
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I will
further
explore
this
thought-provoking issue. On the one hand, public
transport
has overwhelming benefits which can influence
on
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climate change and global warming.
To begin
with, the vital concept of
this
project is reducing traffic congestion and alleviation
of
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roads
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tension.
Also
, as I mentioned before decreasing of personal cars
in
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the
roads
gain less
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and carbon dioxide emissions.
Hence
, it can slow down climate change and global warming.
Furthermore
, it is evident that using
public
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system
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and even faster.
On the other hand
, we cannot underestimate the drawbacks of public
transport
.
Firstly
, in many
cases
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you will wait a long time appropriate bus or tramp.
Thus
, you can waste a lot of your free time.
In addition
, it is not always convenient using it.
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, there
are
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will not be always suitable
roads
for you.
Moreover
, you have to rely on the bus driver. Considering that you cannot administrate him and you do not know the mental and health state of
this
driver. So, in some
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it can be dangerous. In conclusion,
opportunities
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which are provided by public
transport
are not always useful and appropriate.
In contrast
, if it is possible to get over all the disadvantages, there will be only the benefits that remain.
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