Some working parents think that childcare centers provide the best care for children who are still too young to go to school. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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help take care of young stars But I think having
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won't scold or maltreat their grandchildren,
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childcare won't do that to they will make sure
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pour out anger on you when scolded by their employees.which is bad making the children get scared of them.
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