Some young people like to copy the behavior and clothes of famous people today. Why might this be so? What can it cause?

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Several youths love to imitate the characters and

dressing

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of people of influence. It's no longer

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that children

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nowadays are seen putting on

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apparel like celebrities and incorporating their ways of life

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of the interest they had

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them.

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decadence among the youngsters.

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with relevant examples and a conclusion. Luminaries are the group of persons that society Accord a lot of

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for,

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inspired several folks mostly

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young people to be their fans and admirers. Intriguing features about them cause a lot of youths to start parodying their attires and

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their attitudes. When someone is being cherished whatever

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an individual does becomes the

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for their lovers

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exactly what the case is among our adolescents.

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, a movie star in Nigeria has a particular young girl following her mimicking her gowning and all her values, it became so obvious that the lady was interviewed on social media and she confessed to loving

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her.

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known to fantasize

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ways of life of

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personality

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which have really influenced the robing and manners in

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society.

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has degenerated to an alarming rate of decadence amidst the

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generation it infiltrated practically every

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of their lives especially their dressing pattern and lifestyles.

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, our culture embrace women wearing clothes that covers nakedness and men

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are not permitted to put on

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or making their hair but because most female moguls wears half naked clothes and male counterpart

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on earrings and necklaces, the youths emulating them are now appearing like them which has led to various vices and crimes like raping, harlotry and theft. Conclusively, replicating the dignitaries draping and lifestyles are becoming accentuated in the midst of boys and girls

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basically triggered by passion but has

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resulted in severe deterioration globally.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

330 words

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Some young people like to copy the behavior and clothes of famous people today. Why might this be so? What can it cause?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Topic 2: These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.