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Completing University education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job.On the the other hand,other people think that getting experience and developing skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#university #education #job #hand #people #skills
It has been argued by some
people
 that
been
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 a graduate is the best
way
 to land oneself a good
job
 .
While
 others believed that developing
skillful
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experience
 is the best. In my own opinion, I am of the view that getting
experience
 and
development
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of
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skills
 is the
way
 to get a good
job
.
To begin
 with,
In
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 respect to the
perceptives
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perceptions
 of
people
 who believed that completing
first
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a first
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degree
 is the best
way
 to get a good
job
.*( you have not
finish
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this
 statement)* They have suggested that, ~Admittedly~ decades back having a
first
degree
 is the surest
way
 to get good jobs with a competitive salary
this
 is because there are few who are educated and so if you are graduate you become a hot cake for employers for are struggling to get one in their organization but lately
people
 are now enlightened about education as
such
 there are thousands of
people
 with
first
degree
 making the vacancies available more competitive than ever before.
Furthermore
, being a graduate does not
guaranteed
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 landing a good
job
 because some
organization
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organizations
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 give preference to those with higher
degree
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degrees
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 like
Masters
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Masters's
Master's
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degree
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degrees
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 and PhD
as
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apply
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a result making
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate among youths with
first
degree
to
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apply
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rise.
On the contrary
, others have argued that getting
experience
 and developing
skills
 is more important. In my own
perspectives
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perspective
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,
people
 in
this
 group are more able to get jobs because
skills
 are more marketable in the labour market than
certificate
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certificates
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.
Also
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development
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the development
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 of
skills
 and
experience
 help
individual
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an individual
the individual
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 to establish themselves by owning their own business Enterprise
unlike
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 their counterparts who depends on salary.
In addition
 to
this
,
small scale
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 business tends to boost the National economy.
Furthermore
, there is continuity in the transfer of Knowledge and
experience
 among the younger generation even if they are illiterate as it is not stressful to enrol. Conclusively, completing
University
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a University
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 education is thought by some
people
 to be the
way
 to get a good
job
 because in their own
opinion
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,opinion
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 it helps to land good jobs and
competitive
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a competitive
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 salary
while
 I am of the opinion that getting
experience
 and developing
skills
 are more important as
this
 help to boost the national economy, continuity of knowledge and
experience
 and production of entrepreneurs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • specialized training
  • networking
  • baseline requirement
  • financial burden
  • hands-on experience
  • practical skills
  • soft skills
  • dynamic job market
  • entrepreneur
  • formal education
  • portfolio
  • hybrid approach
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