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Because of traffic and housing problems in the cities, the government encourages business to move to the rural area. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The government uses different systems for resettlement from cosmopolitans to the countryside
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 overpopulation and the problems it causes. In my opinion, I think that rural
life
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 is more suitable for a
population
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 in the modern world compared with any disadvantages it might bring. One evident benefit of living in rural
areas
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 is a healthy lifestyle.
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, staying in rural
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 people consume water and oxygen out of pollution and food without pesticides and additives which are available today only in less populated
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 located long distances from manufacturers and plants. These factors lead to a healthy environment, long
life
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 and a nation’s prosperity. Another reason is that if more
population
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 move to the countryside, they would be more socialized and have an active
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. The modern
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 usually spend most of their time in offices sitting in front of computers.
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 could cause serious health diseases and problems in communication.
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, there are obvious disadvantages to living in provincials.
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, a shortage of factories and manufacturing makes the
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 in these
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 suffer from unemployment leading to low quality of
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. Another negative aspect is the lack of bits of knowledge and degradation
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 the deficiency of schools and necessary teaching personnel.
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, rural
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 are not attractive to tourists’ eyes because of their scarcity of night lives and sightseeing. All mentioned points make
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 in those
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 economically poor. In conclusion,
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 there are many points to living in
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 with ecological environment conditions too much would be lost
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. Encouraging businesses to move from cities, the government should anticipate all possible problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic diversification
  • infrastructure strain
  • rural character
  • urban decongestion
  • environmental impact
  • economic stimulation
  • logistical challenges
  • commuting
  • work-life balance
  • cultural clashes
  • habitat destruction
  • rural depopulation
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