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Some people say that nowadays children have an easy life, and some people think that the life of children was easier in the past. Discuss both points of view and also provide relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Life now and past it is easier now

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The lifestyle of
children
 continues to experience changes-
while
 some people think life was better back
then
, others argue that now is better.
This
 essay will
discusses
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 why
that is
 the case. There are a number of reasons
to
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why some think
old
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the old
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 days
where
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were
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 better for their
children
. One of them is because they were saved from
peer-pressure
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peer pressure
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 of having the most expensive gadget. About 10 years ago,
children
 did not have to worry about not
owing
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owning
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 a
smart phone
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smartphone
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,
this
 was not a
phenomena
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 back
then
.
This
 made it easier for all
children
 and focused on play.
Secondly
, the cost of living was not high;
therefore
, parents were able to afford whatever their
children
 asked for.
For example
, it was cheaper to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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