nowadays, most countries improve the standard of living through economic development. But some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, most countries improve their residents’ living
standard
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through economic development, but the
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of some social values is posing an imminent threat to
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society,
thus
putting a strain on society’s environmental preservation and
heritage
conservation. So from my viewpoint, I believe the disadvantages of the phenomenon outweigh the advantages. In terms of
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environmental preservation, the overwhelming commercial activities are contributing to heavy pollution
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both urban and rural areas.
Although
it is beneficial for governments to move industries and businesses into cities to increase their revenue and improve residents’ living efficiency, the air and noise pollution
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by construction and traffic
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destroyed
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mental state and decreased their sense of well-being. As to the
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suburban
areas, it is common to see the polluted river and vanished farmland everywhere, with the
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of beautiful
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occupied by
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disposable plastics and industrial waste. In terms of
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heritage
conservation, the proliferation of the construction of tall buildings and transportation lines
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destructed large amounts of historical sites,
for example
, many infrastructure
facilties
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facilities
have been established on the local monuments
unconciously
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unconsciously
,
thus
bringing huge losses to our cultural
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.
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, if
such
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cannot be strictly restricted, the children will no longer
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of the paramount of protecting our precious cultural
heritage
and spirit, which may
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to a vicious circle and irreversible consequences. In conclusion,
due to
the adverse impact on society’s environmental preservation and
heritage
conservation, I totally hold the opinion that the drawbacks of
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sustainably developing economy outweigh the advantages of it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • economic development
  • social values
  • materialism
  • community welfare
  • sustainable technologies
  • environmental degradation
  • social stratification
  • social cohesion
  • economic status
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