Some people say that educational success depends mostly on a good teacher. Others say it depends on the attitude of the student. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Today's society wants to know how to achieve
success
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in education. A good
teacher
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is mostly responsible for educational
success
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,
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some,
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other people believe that the focus should be on
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attitude. In my opinion, I believe that educational
success
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must rely on an educated
teacher
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. On the one hand, some people think that educational achievement mainly depends on an excellent professor, and I agree.
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with, a good
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from different fields must have
briefly
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knowledge
on
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their perspective fields. So,
school
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children can rely on their knowledge and learn a lot from them to become a topper in the
school
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.
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, a history
teacher
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was become
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a good professor after they
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whole
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concept of
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history.
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,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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can go to private tuition of
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school
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a school
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teacher
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, so that, they can clear their remaining doubts outside
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school
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hours.
On the other hand
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, it is often believed that it is better if the emphasis on educational fulfilment is on
student
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behavior
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. The reason is that in some schools,
due to
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less educated teachers, students are mostly depending on their own style of learning method.
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, they find their mistakes themselves and solve
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without
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help.
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, they become
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success
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in
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school
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.
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, many people consider that
student
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attitude towards one subject is very effectible to become
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success
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in the
school
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. In conclusion,
while
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folks may vary in their opinions between a great
teacher
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and the attitude of the pupils for more
success
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in education, I think that achievement in
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ought to rely on a perfect
teacher
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who learns important subjects, and shares experiences
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students.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedagogy
  • educational attainment
  • student-centered learning
  • intrinsic motivation
  • learner autonomy
  • didactic methods
  • academic achievement
  • inspirational teaching
  • self-directed learning
  • educational trajectory
  • learning facilitation
  • motivational strategies
  • personalized instruction
  • engagement in learning
  • teacher-student rapport
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