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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. ​ To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Educational institutions should embrace
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 numbers of male and female students in all subjects. In the following
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 I will describe why I agree with
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 notion. To commence with, every human being have
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 rights in every field of life
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 in the educational department. To elaborate
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, women play an important role in the progress of every nation so, they should be given all the authority to choose their subjects as males can do. Because women
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 abilities
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 men can do.
However
, universities shouldn't make any difference between genders.
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, The main purpose of universities should make students
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 in every field of life So they should have the same number of males and females.
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, females have their own choice they can choose subjects of their own choice.
To conclude
, Universities should have the same number of males and females in every subject because all human beings have the same rights to spend their life.
Therefore
 in the field of education. there will be no difference in genders It should be the same.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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