The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkwort and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first diagram shows the stages of a
silkworm
's life cycle, while
the second diagram shows the production of skillful
cloth.
Change the spelling
skilful
Overall
, there are four stages in the life cycle of the silkworm
from egg silk
thread. The production of silk
cloth anatomy is characterised by simple ways, commencing with water and ending with the weave.
Initially
, egg
are laid on the underside of a leaf and remain there for ten Fix the agreement mistake
eggs
days
. After
this
, silkworm
larvae usually eats
leaves like mulberry leaves from the eggs and continue in that form for between 4 to 6 weeks. Change the verb form
eat
At the end
of the 10 days
, the silk
thread stage
remain
there for another 3 to 8 Change the verb form
remains
days
and then
create
an oval cocoon on the backside of a leaf . Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
After
this
, the cocoon stage
lasts for around 16 days
and they become moth
in the final Fix the agreement mistake
moths
stage
. At the end
of this
stage
, the moths emerges
and the life cycle starts again.
The second diagram shows Change the verb form
emerge
that
the production of Correct word choice
apply
silk
cloth ,which have
five stages.Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Initially
, the silk
thread of the silkworm
is selected and then
boiled in the next stage
. After boiling in water the threads are unwinded and they are often 300 to 900 meter
. Fix the agreement mistake
meters
Then
these are twisted and dyed and finally
, those are weaved to silk
.Submitted by s_syedy on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words silkworm, silk, days, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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