While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

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In modern society, the majority of schoolers opt for academic study leading to tertiary

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of practical courses that allow them to embark on a technical

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, a group of people believe governments should lay greater emphasis on promoting vocational

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viewpoint. Supporters of vocational

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shortage, employers have to pay additional money to recruit competent

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appears to be an opportunity for students to land a well-paid

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after graduation.

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, from a long-term perspective, it is not a wise choice since

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technical jobs are repetitive, unskilled and physically demanding, which means that

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in these sectors are likely to be replaced by artificial intelligence in the future. I am firmly convinced that

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cannot motivate most students to receive vocational training. Another reason why it is meaningless to encourage students to

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is that it is extremely difficult for technical

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to make a

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is changing rapidly, and each year there are tons of newly emerging and lucrative industries which have drawn millions of working adults to experiment with a

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, those who can seize the opportunity to make

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a favourable position in the

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market.

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is in stark contrast to unskilled technical

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, who can only become proficient at their own

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field through years of repetition without developing relevant skills that allow them

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in another sector. In conclusion, my firm conviction is that despite a lack of

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force, governments should not attach greater importance to vocational

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since

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in relevant

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are more

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constantly improved technology and the nature of technical jobs will largely prevent their

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move.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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skilled workers
vocational training
academic study
qualified
electricians
plumbers
technicians
hands-on experience
job market
infrastructure
economy
unemployment rates
consumer spending
educational paths
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While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that politicians are more influential than scientists, whilst others believe that scientists have more influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

many students are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force they to learn foreign languages. Do you extent agree or disagree?

You want to learn a language. A teacher who teaches this language lives near the area where you live. Write a letter to the teacher. In your letter: - say how you came to know about him/her - explain why you want to learn this language - ask what help he/she can offer

Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.