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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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During
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years
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art
 is part of
peoples
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live
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.
Art
 is quite
abstractive
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 and wide definition.
Art
 is
whole
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the whole
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our
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of our
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live
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 from drawing
sun
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the sun
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 on the sand
till
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to
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 modern buildings.
Art
 influences
on
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our
life
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 and in general can
shows
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 the quality of our
life
.
Art
relate
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 to
the
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society
,
society
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and society
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relate
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 to the
government
. All of them are connected. Individuals of
society
 pay fees to the
government
,
these
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money
go
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 to internal and external economic, military staff,
to
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public services and different others. State
money
 distribution is
difficult
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a difficult
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 task that should be solved by wisdom
society
. Music, theatre, paintings,
monuments
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and monuments
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 are part of our environment.
Government
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A government
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 that
take
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takes
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 care
about
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of
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 its population can invest
money
 in
art
. In
this
case
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 it
allow
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allows
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 citizen to fill
theirself
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their self
 better
while
 going to work, or walking with friends.
Art
 takes care
about
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of
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 our souls. Spending time in opera or theatre can
be invest
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be invested
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 in
good
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a good
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 mood and productive work. If people have opportunities to
have
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a
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rest not only on
sofa
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the sofa
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 near the TV at home
,
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 but cultural rest in
museum
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a museum
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 or conservatory, the quality of their
life
 will increase.
Art
 can decrease the level of depression and anxiety, which can lead to
society
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 development.
However
,
government
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the government
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 can invest any
money
 in the arts to improve
cultural
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the cultural
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 level and psychological status of the population.
On the other
hand
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 public health need investment, as other public services. Because of
this
, some people think that
government
 investment in
the
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art
 is a waste of
money
. Politicians who think so wouldn’t take care
about
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of
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this
 important part of our
life
.
Combination
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A combination
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 of
art
 and social investment is
a
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key to
solve
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this
 task. How to figure out what percentage should be spent
for
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on
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art
 is another discussionable question.
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