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Proper function of prison is to punish criminals and life in prison should be hard. Do you agree or disagree?

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An offender should be punished for the
crime
 he
commited
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committed
that is
 what
law
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the law
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 says but in my view putting them behind
the
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bars and
to make
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 their life miserable should not be the only motto of their
punishment
. Since it will adversely affect their mindset and they will not turn into a good
person
 in society.
Reasons
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The reasons
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 for my belief
is
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are
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 explained in the following paragraph. We live in a society which is ruled by the law and
if
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any
person
 that commits an offence ought to be punished.
However
, I believe that motive of
a
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punitive action is to bring a positive change in a lawbreaker. Sometimes few persons are sentenced
jail
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to jail
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 for a small
crime
 but in
jail
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,jail
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 they are ill-treated in jail. Not only they are made to wash
clothes
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the clothes
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 of their inmates but
also
 beaten up by police for no reason.
Niether
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Neither
 they are allowed to make friends nor they can talk to family.
This
 kind of behaviour with them is what
inspire
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 them to commit more
crime
 in future as it fills them with anger.
For instance
, Dawood was caught in a case of
street
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a street
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 brawl, he was put behind
the
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bars for six months during which he was tortured by police and
other criminal
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another criminal
other criminals
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 which made him
to
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kill persons including a head constable. If a
person
 a treated well during his
punishment
 period he might have a change of heart that can make him a good
person
. There have been measures taken up by
few
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a few
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government
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governments
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 regarding
this
. One of
it's
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its
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kind
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kinds
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 is that
,
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 a prisoner is allowed to study during his
punishment
 period.
This
 will not only help him to complete his study but
also
it
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helps him to get rid of evils within him.
For example
, Raju Pandey was allowed to complete his degree
of
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in
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 Law and today he is a very
well known
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well-known
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 lawyer who fights for
rights
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the rights
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 of poor people free of
the
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costs
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cost
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. In conclusion, though no
crime
 should go unpunished, the severity of
punishment
 should not make a
person
to
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apply
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fall
in
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into
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trap
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the trap
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 of
crime
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the crime
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 world.
Instead
 of punishing an offender harshly, they should be treated with harmony so they can become a good human being for society.
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