The word should have only one goverment rather thana national goverment for each country. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

The world is over complicated
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multiple
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governments
government
. Is the idea of one general power that rules the world
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doable?
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are the benefits and negative
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I will be expressing some specific advantages and disadvantages of common
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government
for all the world. Is an interesting
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alternative, yet
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viable since there are many points of view and
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, If there was only one
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there would be internal conflicts between the population. Many of the current heads of state disagree with political matters, it is efficient because each can rule in the territory they are elected,
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if every citizen responded to a unique political authority, they must all be on board with the
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that are made
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the population would need to be satisfied with how the country is being managed.
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concept
is a
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utopia
since there is no scenario where
this
could happen in
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reality
.
For instance
, if the head of the political administration decides that fracking is worth the
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to nature, almost half of the individuals would be against
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people would be
unconfortable
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uncomfortable
with their
goverment
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government
.
On the other hand
,
this
already happens in every country, it is
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extremely
difficult to satisfy the entire population because there
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more than one opinion inside a nation.
This
idea of making an only
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government
for all is
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oversimplifying
oversimplified
the problems that we have in the present,
although
it is a fact that borders would open and be less strict so
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and
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making
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around the globe, would be way more practical.
Instead
of having issues between
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the border lines, we would have more internal conflicts.
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we must remember that around the planet, we do not all share the same kind of
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government
and
econimic
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economic
order,
while
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are communist and most are democratic and capitalistic.
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and voters would be forced to get used to a drastic change. To
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, the concept sounds good at first but if we look closer, we will find out that it does not give a significant
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advantage
that is
worth the negative
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consequences
that
this
might have. We realize that many problems that we have today, we would have them still, but with different
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. In order to make
this
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project
come to life, the great majority would
disaprove
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disapprove
since is too much of a difference.
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